Hello! My friend David Seaby (BADD) referred me to your book :-) Top marks for originality! The opening seemed very decent to me, I really like this style of dialogue and narration though perhaps at times it was just a little bit difficult to work out exactly what you meant - whether you were ref... view book

Thought your english was generally good considering it's your second language, though watch out for 'chapter 1' (instead of 'chpter 1'). After a quick look that's the only small mistake I noticed. Your command of language is excellent, but the dialogue has to be an area to think about here. It rea... view book

Your research seems to be pretty good though maybe there are a few too many internet sources perhaps. I did think that is places you made some generalisations or sweeping statements - I was thinking about where you might make a judgement or evaluation of something for example. Some practical suggest... view book

I like the opening, and the general style, which I found easy to read. The pace, tone and rhythm are all appropriately synchronised to the content - and saying all that doesn't reflect how hard that is to achieve, certainly it is something I have never managed to do! In my personal and v humble opin... view book

Definitely reminded me of Robert Heinlein, and the classic sci-fi of my parents' generation and before. I thought generally speaking the tone and pace were appropriately used and consistently maintained according to the content. Wasn't sure about the opening, I always feel that an opening requires ... view book