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What did you think of Harper Collins' review? Honestly? view book
Sort of staccato and uncomfortable The story is promising but I think the writing doesnt rise to the challenge. It is all she's and he's and his and hers. Really clumsy. Needs a really good going over and then another one but don't give up. Just putting it here isn't enough though. You need to keep... view book
Lovely words but ruined by the structure of the phrases and the bizzare punctuation. Go in and make grammatical sense of this and I think you could have a winner. No editor would take this on at the moment because there is just so much to do. Just as a pointer you shouldn't have all those tirets - ... view book
Consider reducing the exclamation marks throughout. Far too many adjectives too, most of which are superfluous. Also it is very she, he, she, he, she, he. So many paragraphs start with she in the first chapter that it looks ugly on the page. Try and change that and see how it looks and sounds, Also... view book
