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I've been doing what I thought was writing for too long to think about. I recently decided that this is no longer a fun thing to do when I feel like it, it's something I must do. If I don't get these stories out of my head it might explode. My first book, Off Track under the pen name Alice Griffiths, is currently for sale in the Kindle store at Amazon.comThanks to everyone who gave me feedback to improve it from the raw draft to the polished book.
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Your premise is great. I found the first chapter a bit slow to get through. It feels like you have started the book long before the story. My suggestion is to either cut this in half, or drop it completely. Start you story with the event, then go back and fill in the details. Good luck view book
I started chuckling with the first few sentences. Nitpicks When you describe the figure in the black cloak, you misplace your modifier - unless the computer has bones instead of arms :) I like the voice and the first section of chapter one, what happens when the human starts to interact is t... view book
I like what you've done. The only thing I would suggest you refine is the middle of the prelude. It's interesting, but an info dump. Backed. view book
Fabulous. I loved it from the first sentence. Backed view book
Great writing. I like the contrast between husband and wife's experiences. A couple of suggestions: you have some passive voice in the high violence scene - i.e. ...there were angry red welts that covered her both her breasts. Might read better as, ...angry red welts covered her breasts. The ot... view book