This is excellent. The opening chapter is powerful, the difference between reading in the local press that such a thing has happened in the community and being with Rania as it does, and so well set up by the mix of affection, annoyance and confusion in their scene. The style is quite strong, t... view book

Wonderfully done, love your confidence and humour, could read this all day. view book

You have managed that most difficult of things, an opening that hooks and at the same time effortlessly establishes the novel's credentials. This will offer more than family drama. Zinnia and Felix are not ordinary but, at the same time, Zinnia's recollection of her father's expressions, now lost, i... view book

I'm not sure about the omni narrative style, but I like the present tense and love the way you use words. The way you string the words, ideas and sentences together, and the use of detail smoothly creating the moment, the thought and, most of all, the person. Johnny comes vividly to life. Sometimes ... view book

OK jury's out on this so far – for me at least. Feels like you start to hit your stride towards the end of the first chapter, but chapter two opens with a monologue that gets boring quickly. You do have some really good stuff, not least like the excited fatty waiting for the pizza. I think you can p... view book