Hi Ariom, just read the first two chapters and I like where this is going. You are doing a wonderful job drawing the character of Davy. A few things I noticed: ~ While the drawing of Davy is really good, the first chapter lacks description and feeling for the MC. (We learn at the end of the c... view book

I don't think that was everything...there was so much on that thread. I remember the oodles I put on. As for this: Selfish-Backed-backing something because you were a part of it and/or have a vested interest in it. view book

I really love this Amanda. You really have an immeasurable talent. Only read a bit, but would happily read on if not at work and not on the computer. view book

This is something so very different from anything I would opt to read. I am returning your read and it was a pleasure to do so. You can certainly write. Without a doubt. Your pacing is quick, though I wonder if not a little too quick. You gallop along without allowing the reader to catch up and I am... view book

Before authonomy I never read chick lit but I really have developed a taste for it. You have a natural female voice that is engaging and entertaining without being whiney or annoying. I think the first chapter is good, but I do think there is too much back story right off the bat for me. Maybe break... view book