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KaliedaRik

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Concerning my shelving policy: books that I consider to be in a publishable state (in other words those books that I give 6 stars to without hesitation) will always find a welcome spot on my shelf.

PLEASE - no spam. I rarely reciprocate anything other than crits. Also, please don't shelve my book (SpinTrap) unless you truly believe that it is publishable as it stands -- which, given that I've not yet finished the first draft, is doubtful.

Latest revisions. The chapters from 40 onwards are being written as part of the NaNoWriMo 2011 challenge, with each chapter uploaded as it is completed - warning: these chapters are being written at speed and are thus dog-rough and liable to change significantly when editing kicks in.

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SpinTrap

Rik Roots

... and you think you're having a bad day?


Kal is not having the best of times: his friends have deserted him; the city around him has changed; and the man whose head he lives in knows he is there. And now he has to save the world - though working out who, or what, is threatening the world is proving to be a problem too ...

Yes, I know how confusing the first chapters are: they're supposed to be confusing. Persevere and you will find your rewards.

I would particularly welcome critique of the text from chapter 51 - chapters 1-3, on the other hand, dont need any further comments, thank you!

I always return crits in the manner in which they are offered.

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Cariad wrote 1 day ago

Hey, thanks, Rik. :)

Tim Andrewartha wrote 15 days ago

Thanks, Rik. That's really useful feedback.

Big Daddy wrote 15 days ago

Just to let you know that today and tomorrow are the last days Stormb....

MauriceR wrote 15 days ago

Thanks for the valuable comments Rik. My story has a beginning and a....

Writer in Red wrote 15 days ago

Which ever ones you choose but I was not asking for any return favors....

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I wrote 15 days ago

Hi, Tim. Comments on Chapter 1 below - I'll be back with more comments later today. As ever with my comments, remember that they're my thoughts as I read. Take on board only those which strike a chord with you, and bin the rest. Blurb: It's spot on, I think. I meet the MC, discover the missio... view book

I wrote 15 days ago

Hi, Maurice. I've jotted down some comments on the opening 3 chapters as I was reading them. I strongly advise you to take them with a large pinch of salt as they're kneejerk reactions with a whole bunch of assumptions tied in to them. Only take on board those thoughts that chime with you, and du... view book

I wrote 29 days ago

Another message from me, the Author of this work-in-progress. If you're looking to do some crit, please consider starting your read from Ch51, as the first 3 chapters have been critted to death and are now pretty settled. Ch51 is the start of the MCs adventures in a completely different world, wh... view book

I wrote 208 days ago

Hi, Cynthia. A hundred days (and more) ago, you offered me some SF42 comments on my book. I can only apologise for taking so long to return that kindness. Anyway, here's some thoughts I had as I read through the first few chapters of Alecner. Take them or leave them, as you see fit. Overal... view book

I wrote 211 days ago

Hi, Friday. I'm returning the crit you offered on my book ages back. Sorry it's taken so long. I've only read the first chapter. Even so, I can safely say that you need no advice from me on how to write. The read is very smooth: the scenes are constructed economy, the initial plots are establishe... view book

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