Hi Jane, I've only read the first chapter for now but I like it. It's really well written and I didn't see any errors. There's a spacing issue in one place (tiny matter and easy to fix) when they're talking about no heat in the house until September. I don't like Frankie very much, she seems a bit... view book

Hi Ravenna :-) A beautiful and vivid setting. In places it read more like a script than a novel, but from your pitch I see that's what you had in mind so maybe it's best for attracting the people you want to attract :-) I think you defintely have something here but it does need work. I see from so... view book

Hi Raymond :-) Have starred this. It's not my normal sort of read but I did enjoy it. I think the opening could be a lot stronger though, more action of some sort, some kind of indication of the plot right at the start to interest the reader. Your POV needs a little work as it switches around a litt... view book

Hi Rosemary :-) I’ve read the prologue and first 4 chapters, and I love that you have written a story about your great-grandmother! Too often our ancestors are black and white pictures in frames, we forget they were people too and I’m always curious as to their thoughts and passions. A wonderful sl... view book

Hi Marilyn, I’ve read all six chapters, got totally caught up in the story you’ve woven. Wonderfully descriptive (but not overly so) writing. I could picture certain settings very clearly. I felt for the girls, so young and to be forced into something so adult. I could totally understand why Sumati... view book