Ms. Henderson, I think you've got a touching premise here and a very interesting story. I've read the first two chapters, and they really raise my interest to read more, and getting people to turn the page is your one job. The quality of the writing is very good, as well - quite deft, straightfor... view book

This is a very exciting concept, with a mysterious and deadly phenomenon dissolving people by the thousands. Here are a few notes: Prologue & Chapter One Kill the prologue. I know prologues of this kind are conventional wisdom, but convention wisdom produces a lot of bad books. The prologue do... view book

I've read the first two chapters. You've got a vivid style, Willsin is well characterized and the story develops at a fast pace. Those are all good things. Two minor things in Chapter Two came to my attention: Willsin refers to the Tec-9 as an assault rifle. Then Willsin says, "The only thing I t... view book

Sully, You've got an excellent and ferociously nightmarish concept here. I have the privilege to live in Orlando, Florida, United States, where the law is behind the citizen and the homeowner. If *two* men broke into my house and I killed them both with one of the 12-guages I keep handy, the poli... view book

Ms. Iva P., As I promised before Christmas, I've read two chapters of Fame and Infamy - numbers 21 and 22. You have a very exciting book here. The mechanics are excellent - I didn't notice any grammatical or punctuation errors. The setting is very specific and quite fascinating, and you're clearl... view book