Hello, sorry for the delay in responding to you. I have read the first four chapters and enjoyed it very much. The story moves along at a lovely pace and the writing keeps a good balance of dialogue and description. My notes are really just small editorial things which is why I didn't leave a comm... view book

I like this. It made me laugh. It reminded me a little bit of a young, female Terry Pratchett. If I can venture a suggestion. I think it would be better to start at: " Essentially...if you want a fairy-tale life," and allow the previous information to be revealed in bits thereafter. I have only rea... view book

Oh My GOD!!! This is vile - I love it! When I read the pitch I was knocked sideways thinking what a clever reverse way of looking at the horror of crime. I couldn't have been more wrong! Naomi is an absolute monster, and a brilliantly crafted one. A giggling, vicious over grown child with nothin... view book

Love the premise and really enjoyed what I read. Personally I found the pitch a bit too much to take in, so much information. It might be worth editing it a little, we don't need to know everything, and also split it up in to two or three paragraphs. I do seem to be the only person who feels this... view book

Beautiful descriptive prose. Intelligent YA fantasy. My favourite kind. It will do well on here. Well done, Alethea view book