Oh, one last thing. I have a keen intuition when it comes to first sentences, though you don't have to listen to me! Okay. Here is my advice: Get rid of your very first sentence altogether. "...everything had changed for me..." We know that everything will change for you because you are about... view book

I liked your poetry so much, I had to read this, Jerry. Really really good. Solid writing, not in your face like some non fiction memoirs I read. The style is simple, and filled with the right amount of humility and humanistic qualities. Ironically, I just lost a dear friend (she was much older)... view book

Great young adult writing, you definitely know your market! Your story is plot-forward, and even though I only read the first three chapters, it kept my curiosity piqued the whole time. If the rest of the book is just as good, then you have a winner here. A couple of typos, easy to fix. Watch ... view book

"Transhuman." The word alone is an incredibly layered word, love it.. Though I wouldn't mind it if that were your title. I find your writing style unusual, though I can't put my finger on exactly why...in any case, I really enjoyed reading this. It made me very curious, and I love books that ma... view book

Barry!! Love it love it love it. Read the first few chapters twice, a few days apart, to make sure it is as good as I think it is, but could not find one thing amiss. That said, I will offer a bit of advice: Even though it all flowed for me, an editor might want you to keep all of your chaps... view book