I think you've really got a great premise for a story here. Your long pitch definitely caught my attention and had me looking forward to starting it. I do, however, have a few nitpicks, mostly just what the others have pointed out. If you don't agree with my comments, please feel free to ignore them... view book

I am so loving this! I've only read the first couple of chapters so far, but I am enjoying it immensely! I like the dynamic between Naomi, Michael and Hunter, and I can't help but wonder if there will be a romance brewing between two of them...I just can't decide which two that would be. One thin... view book

Well, this certainly promises to be something different than your average run-of-the-mill teen romance involving a human girl and a not-so-human boy. Aliens - I really like that premise! I'm thoroughly enjoying what I've been reading so far, just a couple of small errors I found right away: In... view book

What a fun story this is! Normally, I do not read children's fiction (teen fiction - and mostly romance - is usually as young as I go), but your pitch intrigued me, so I decided to give it a go. So far, I'm really enjoying it! I love how Charlie's mom names her children after her favorite scientists... view book

Your short and long pitches certainly seem to promise a very interesting story! I've only read the first couple of chapters, and honestly, I am so terrible at critiquing/reviewing anything that doesn't fall into the chick lit/romance category (even then, I kinda suck at it), but I can at least ackno... view book