Mary, I first backed your book some months ago, and I still think it's an excellent piece of writing. I'm pleased to see it has now progressed almost to the Editor's Desk. Your dialogue is really good and believable and shows up the characters well. Great descriptions too, though I haven't had time... view book

On my WL waiting for a proper look, but glancing through I noticed a couple of things: "II thought we were just looking; trying before we brought..." should be "..we bought...", and I would suggest that in the lines that follow, it would flow better if "however" was the start of a new short sente... view book

Neville, this is not really my area of expertise, so there is not much I can sensibly comment on. It could do with a tight edit, and one or two of your sentence structures are a bit strange: - "Others thought it possible that she could be a witch..." would be much tidier as "Others thought she mig... view book

I really liked the first chapter, an interesting construction of the clash between two cultures. Liked the changes of POV, though this might become a little tiresome if carried on too far, which you haven't. There does seem to be one small inconsistency in this plan - the para. that begins "Just in... view book

Jose, I would endorse all the other comments about the missing chapters. It doesn't help the reader, or more importantly you. A barrier is automatically created which alienates the reader and dissuades them from reading on. Might I suggest, that instead of your lengthy introduction/explanation, you ... view book