Thanks . . . But you're an idiot. Interestingly, Superman managed to leap tall buildings in a single bound, who knew? British courts don't have stenographers. And as for the language of 'black people' - you have no clue. Please don't advise anybody else. \my family speaks the Queen's English,... view book

Thank you so much for thorough and carefully considered comments. I'm not going for desk because I know there's nothing there. The opening is so complex because I am running too many themes. The feeling unwell and the out of body experience is brought on not only by the situation but she is als... view book

I've looked at this before. I think you've bitten off more than you can chew. The present tense style doesn't match the subject matter. From the pitch I'm expecting the story to be a slow and painful reflection. Instead you've tried make it immediate. I don't believe it works. Death and tragedy t... view book

I've had a quick look. I must confess that I've no idea what a 'skinwalker' is - I had to use Google. If you are looking for worldwide audience you may want to consider this, however, I may just be ignorant. I also think that you have far too many speech tags. Firstly, the conversation is betw... view book

Thanks for your comments. I could turn this into a fiction debate. Almost everything you highlight is quite deliberate - I cannot say if it is good fiction writing or not. Certainly, in action thrillers we are not of the belief that characters should behave in a typical or stereotypical way. May... view book