Well, Bob, this is great writing. Interesting premise. Location: check plus. And your characters are appealing. I skipped around some to get a look at some of the later chapters since I knew I wouldn't have time to read the whole thing and was pleased to see the story holds up all the way throug... view book

I've really enjoyed reading this. It's tightly written. You have an ear for dialogue and for humor. And the characterizations also work really well. This is an enjoyable story and I wish I had time for more than the three chapters that I read. I'm backing it and hopefully I'll get time to come ... view book

Hi, You certainly have an interesting premise here. I really enjoyed what I read of your story. The "spoilt" concept and your killer are definitely good hooks. Some small suggestions to take or leave: I would have liked to know more about Chelsea and Lucas up front since it seems your main... view book

Hi Cheryl, You have a lot going on here and it's definitely an interesting story. Shark bites. Drama. Aftermath. Estranged family. If I could just make one suggestion, you might want to think about including more sensory details. I didn't really get a clear sense of Travis's pain during the... view book

You have an excellent voice in this piece and you build sympathy for the protagonist right away. The opening is fantastic. I love the part about the blue sky. You also do a good job of posing interesting juxtapositions. I'll keep this on my shelf for a while and hope I get some time to read some... view book