Hi, Congratulations on making it to the ED. I've only read the first chapter so far and have jotted down a few comments that you may find useful if you are editing this before the HC review. Haven't read the prologue as it wouldn't load (probably my browser) but was wondering if you really neede... view book

Hi, I've only read the first chapter so far. You have a great story here set in Georgia and your writing took me there straight away. I thought the opening could be stronger and generally, less description would keep me interested in the narrative. Perhaps try something like this as an opening :... view book

Ch 6 I liked the way this showed the deepening relationship between God and the narrator and gives more backstory about the narrator. Few minor points :- 12.03 - doesn't have any significance when talking about dates but it does if it refers to the time of death. "hording my men" - do you mean ... view book

Your writing is unique and gives an insight into people who have been abused in one way or another. The narrator's tenderness with his daughter is powerful. My comments on Ch5 are: "Our lies, their lies and therein lies the story" - this gag didn't quite work for me, although it was clever. "... view book

Unusual and drew me in from the start. Lots of dark humour and a lively narrator. I've only read the first three chapters so far and my comments are based on those. Apart from minor typos (alter for altar boy and sausage meet for meat), I'm not sure the grammar needs to change. I know that often... view book