Hey, you got an interesting story here. Nice pitch I felt the last bit, “or are they?” was a bit cheesy though. The Blurb: Interesting blurb. It tells a good bit of the story, but not too much. Prologue: Are the italics really needed? If it’s obviously different from other parts of the n... view book

Hey, getting to your stuff earlier than expected. I read to Chapter Three, by authonomy standards. I’m not someone who reads a lot of memoirs, about five in total, so keep that in mind. Pitch: don’t like the “yrs” . Maybe try to rearrange it so everything fit if that’s the problem, to me I doe... view book

Hi,I read to chapter four and I have very little complaints. Hook: It seems too wordy to me, I would cut “adult” out of “adult daughter”. Pitch/Blurb: I think this is one of the better blurbs I've read. It seems to capture what the story is about and introduces a few key characters and makes th... view book

There’s a strong voice and a good premise. I think the stream of consciousness style is done well in this piece. The Hook: Didn’t really like it, didn’t think the “Would it go to your head?” bit really works out. The pitch is good. Throughout the first chapter my interest in the story kin... view book

I read to Chapter Three. This is a well written story that has great characters. The back-story is sneaked in, so it’s interesting and the pace of the book doesn’t get clogged up by what happened in the past, but there’s enough to keep the characters interesting and dimensional as well as to... view book