Haven't started reading yet, but before I do, wanted to mention fantastic pitch. If I read this on the back of a book, I would be reading the first chapter while I queued to pay for it. Right, now time to read... view book

Hi, I really like this, I really do, however, I felt there were some issues. In some places, I felt the description was clunky and could do with some pruning. I did have a specific phrase in mind, but I can only remember the first three words now - it was as if... The characterisation is great. ... view book

This is reminscent in some ways of Oryx & Crake. By that I mean stunning. I think it is so hard when you write in this genre to show and not tell because you are constantly introducing the reader to new concepts and environments. You have accomplished this, again, in a similar way to Oryx & Crake... view book

Right, negatives - Addressing the reader. This really, really aggravates me. I don't want to be told how I should read your text, I don't want a summary of the following chapters. I want to read for myself and make up my own mind. Having read the synopsis and then the opening brief, I was really... view book

This is a lovely, light yet mysterious read. I've only read to chapter 7, but have enjoyed it very much. I like your narrative voice, it's really individual adn clear. I did have a problem occasionally with tenses - i.e. start of chapter 7 "tonight" might be better as "that night". I don't thi... view book