Hi Kaleigh, On the down side, your work didn't really appeal to me. But I loved your attitude, as displayed on your profile, and so I read on. As you can guess I am not one of these people who patronise with niceties for their own ends! I can,however, give you one BIG PLUS (see I've stolen... view book

Laurence, As requested I have had a look and will comment. As I finished your prologue (with particular reference to the better second section) I had a strong sense of the ancient time period you wanted to create. That was essential and it meant that the contrast with the present was apparent. ... view book

Donna, I made an assumption you wanted comments. You can always set your Vampiric friend on me if I am wrong! Poe is one of my faves, so a good quote to start. One of the best prologues here, because rather than just showing a victim, you show the emotion of the survivor. That, at least for... view book

Joffrey, In response to your message I read Prologue and Chapter 1. Your tags do not mention crime and yet I would compare your prologue very favourably to crime novels I've read that start with a murder. You have a particularlygood opening line and "Justice have a sound" is one of the best lines... view book

It was great to see when reading this book a first person prologue, a change from some of the oblique or neither here nor there third person ones. Often used even when the remainder (or majority) of the book is first person. This Prologue was action packed and because it focused on the main voice, ... view book