This is really good! I like the interplay between your characters. It seems really natural, as does your conversation. It has all the elements that are so enjoyable! I love both Luke and Eva. Wonderful job! One small typo: "Or, over the summer, the water Elems learned how to heat THE some of the ... view book

I was compelled to read on. I love the story of Cinderella and I felt betrayed at having it rewritten so differently from the original. I had to read on. As I read I saw that the writing is excellent! The characters are distinct. I was sad to see Cinderella be bad ... but it is a very cleaver c... view book

Smooth. That is the word for this. The dialogue and the information, the characters are all woven together seamlessly. It's almost poetic. Fantasy is not really my line, but this is not bogged down by excessive explanation or strangeness like others seem to be. It is simply imaginative and very... view book

I love a good people story. The idea is up my alley: interesting characters with intriguing histories coming together in a strange environment. The intrigue is good and keeps me turning pages. I would have enjoyed more conversation, I think, between the characters, especially in chapter two. The... view book

I really love first person, but it is hard to pull off. And you've done it wonderfully. I love that even the pitch is in first person. I don't recall reading that on authonomy before. Your writing has a certain daring quality to it, though I can't really put my finger on what it is. The charact... view book