Powerful stuff. As a solicitor, I work with the victims to prosecute their abusers in misdemeanor cases. Their stories are not as traumatic as yours. But the fear is that if we don't handle the situation then and there, who knows what the future might hold? I certainly don't get to really know or un... view book

Great idea and a good first chapter to boot. Congrats on the success on Amazon. Will come back to read more later. Alan view book

Intriguing first chapter. A zombie late for lunch! Great. And vomiting on a nun? Is this going to be a cross between 'Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man (Woman)' and 'Dawn of the Dead'? view book

Very gripping first chapter. I am intrigued and hope to find time to continue reading. While I thought of suggesting you give more description of your surroundings to make the story more literary somehow, I think your simple, direct telling is what is called for. Good choice and good work. Alan view book

"A woman walks by with a fur coat . . . the drops start again." Wish I could copy and paste. Anyway, that sentence is one example of a few which run too long. There are some minor grammatical issues. But this is a very good first chapter and I definitley want to read more. Even had me going to Googl... view book