Bob, I loved the opening. The execution of the story is well done, I really enjoyed chapter 6. It made me understand what the story is about. Humans are made of thoughts and feelings. I thought SPIN is like a warning to us all. Keiko view book

Philip, for some reason I had female voice telling me the story. This is literature, so I expect for it to go far. I loved the poetic style and unexpected endings. I also think your mastery of writing is high. Backed with pleasure. Keiko view book

Lisa, first the nit pick. Characters are very well drawn but I think they lack movements. Otherwise, I think you have a very poetic way of writing. The first chapter was intriguing.The MS is very easy to read. I hope it will attract many readers. Backed with pleasure. Keiko (A Thousand Words) view book

Dear Okamoto san, this is very well researched/interviewed MS. A nit pick first, there are some camera position instructions, they should be omitted. You might want to make the theme clearler. Otherwise, Akiko's fury is spiritual and philosophical. The action packed and informative details. I think... view book

Dear Betty, first, thank you for doing the research. I think you ere able to write as a novelist, not journalist. The voice is mature and well paced. I have lived in Montreal, so if you can find how to put accents in French, they will appreciate. If you can beable to put one line about how cold it i... view book