Dena. A Light In The Dark. Very good reading but, especially for this site, the paragraphs are far too long. Have a look at the present top 5 on the editor's desk and compare their word count and paragraphs to yours. I'm sure there are a number of natural breaks available. At the moment readers may ... view book

Andrew. I noticed Killing Paradise a while ago and keep coming back to it, so have decided to give it a place on my shelf. Agree with earlier comments re the pitch which could be made shorter, without losing the punch. (the 2nd para with all the names drags) Re the 'play script' comment, thoroughly... view book

A very interesting slant on the German's visit to Antarctica which, after two chapters, promises a very good read. I must disagree with J.Kinkade's comment on the pitch. For me it is a bit too long with over use of capital letters in the wrong place and some superfluous information. On my shelf. Go... view book

Jacqueline. This caught my attention by the great title. Hope you will soon get an appropriate cover for it that should attract more readers. My only critique at the moment is the length of the first chapter. I'm sure you could find a suitable place to split it so readers would be encouraged to cont... view book

RM I've backed this as I believe it's a good book but it does need some editing. Many of the adverbs and adjectives appear superfluous, cluttering up the flow and detracting from the story. gentle veil swirled - which sometime curled - in such frigid opposition from the elements - his body taut... view book