I think format will help you out here, poetry is not just about the words but its a visual experience as well. Thank you for sharing your work, as a poet I find others willing to share brave and inspiring, and this really is the perfect format for a poet. Thanks and Good luck. Try the formatting and... view book

Nice job, I didn't read on because its not my genre, I get the feeling some of this can be cut because there are really intriguing parts that can be hooked together, improving the flow and engaging the reader at the same time. Good luck with this! view book

To be honest, I'm waaaaay into YA, which is why I didn't read more, I think this could flow better if you cut out some of your "as" s and "was"s, a little more editing to make it sharper, and I would rethink the opening, you know how first impressions are, gotta be strong, engaging, captivating. But... view book

Wonderful, captivating, lovely writing, backed it at once and shelved it for further reading. Goodluck, not that you'll need it. :O) view book

This is good but I think you should cut down on some of your historical descriptions of the environment because it distracts the reader from the purpose--the death and killer--and it makes the killer seem like an excited tourist, which though that may be your aim, is distracting at a time like this.... view book