Hi, I'm so sorry it has taken me so long to get back to you. I liked your short and long pitch. They're well written. I personally find a slight problem with your style. The pace of your writing is slow which fits in with the eastern theme very well. It reminds me a little of The Ground Beneath he... view book

This is quite creepy stuff. I really feel for her. Its a classic story line of lock someone away and study them but you've made it your own. Shelved. view book

Awh! This is gorgeous. Exactly my kind of read. Adam is very cheeky and great fun and Emma is sweet. I do agree with some of the comments, How do I know her name isn't Eve except I've read the long pitch? I think you need to find a way to weave it in early on. Maybe have her give herself a short pep... view book

This is very enjoyable. You make this seem very real. What I've read so far is like a newsreport, or an expose. That's not a criticism, the immediacy of it makes me believe that this could happen very easily. Just be careful not to overuse this technique. Most readers like to be able to engage with ... view book

This is very well written. I love vampire stories. I really liked your beginning. I was pulled into his world right away. One point, if you're adding speech tags you should use a comma, not a full stop e.g. 'Okay.' She replied. This should be 'Okay,' she replied. You do this a lot. It would be a rea... view book