Thanks, this is the type of critique I'm looking for. Really helpful and answers one of the things I was wondering about. All smiles ;p view book

Going on my watchlist to finish reading later. I have a feeling it will end up on my backed list as well. I love how you didn't start this with description of the world and the state it's in, (which seems to be the mark of a very new writer.) Instead you draw the reader into the world with the char... view book

I enjoyed this...I could see getting lost in the pages of this book. (For some reason the computer screen just doesn't allow me that luxury). The only thing I would have you think about is the prologue. From a readers standpoint, not a writers, I don't ever read them and know other readers who ski... view book

Hey, just read part of the first chapter. To be honest I skipped the prologue...I always do, so please don't take offense. Anyway, I read most of the first chapter and agree with ipaintwithwords. I think a lot of the backstory can be taken out and weaved through the rest of the story. It really s... view book

Just my thoughts...I really like the premise and have only read the first chapter....but, to me, it doesn't seem like your story begins in quite the right place. I think if you show the attack, not necessarily what is attacking her, and then have her stumbling around confused, it would allow the re... view book