Hilarity. Simple hilarity. Damn you and your chp 5 cliffhanger! view book

This is fun and the writng - while needing a polish - is VERY promising. I'm not sure about 'exasperatedly', for example. The Chronomech jumping into Nick's mind 'just because' is a bit, well, 'just because the story needs it to'. I don't mind it cramming into his mind, I just want a better reason. ... view book

What is there to say? Any comment I have would be a waste. I think you may, ever so slightly, over telegraph your themes in chp1? Does that count as helpful? 'Cause it's all I've got. Everything else is deft, moody and fine, fine, fine. The standard exclamation on reading something like this is '... view book

This is excellent, excellent stuff. I'm nitpicking for the sake of it. Because critiques and new eyes are important, even if the view through those eyes is glaucomic. chp1 - Not sure about 'agony'. The single word at the start is just the wrong side of cheesy. But you echo it nicely, so soon, tha... view book

This is great. Funny. Well written. And so very shelved. I'm not in a position to judge how well the jargon would work on a true n00b. But I had fun view book