Hi, I just read your first two chapters and I life very much, however, I also feel that some diversity of length in your paragraphs would improve the rhythm of the read. Also, forgive me but I'm taking the liberty of suggesting a slight alteration to your opening lines. "Take the shot. Take the sho... view book

Egad, the mother in law from hell. Good concept, good dialogue. I would like a bit more of the unexpected, something that goes wrong. It seems that it is all too easy for her and it gets so I was just going on reading and knowing in advance that it would go smoothly for her. Get me on the dge of my ... view book

Hi RB, I'm going to give you the same advice that was given to me. Go over your text and take out every unecessary word. Then take out al the rredundant sentences. You will end up with a much crisper novel. I love the story's premise and you have a real flair for creating very visual scenes. I love ... view book

What can I say except, WOW. Incredible suspence and great action. This should be made into a movie. Sorry it took me so long to get to it but I have to admit, I wasn't sure I'd like it. How wrong could I be? I am very happy to endorce you. Monique (Getting Skinny) view book

HI Katherine, here I am at last. Sorry it took so long to get to you. What a wonderful story teller you are. I was completely captivated by your voice and the unfolding of the tale. Bravo. Job well done and I'm happy to put you on my shelf. Monique (Getting Skinny) view book