Jukav, The first two paragraphs are great beginning, pulls in the reader, though the structure could use a bit of work. I had a hard time though, as the grammar needs to be worked on, in those paragraphs and through out the rest of the story. You also need to work on varying your sentence struct... view book

Oh Ali, I understand your plight. I'm way behind on everything. BTW what make is that 12 string your playing in your avatar? I bet its a Taylor. Everyone loves Taylors. view book

Ali, I have put you on my watchlist, a past life story intrigues me. Hope to get to it soon. I also hope you can come back and enjoy more of "static" as when you visted a while ago you wrote, "thought I'd commented on this before but I was probably befuddled on joining the site! this is gorgeous.... view book

Nikki, As I read your tale I felt like was in the midst of someone presenting me their slides from holiday. Your style is very conversation, very light, very breezy, but the story feels well-rehearsed. Funny thing to say I know, especially since we want out stories to be tight and professional, b... view book

Hello Nicola, I've got you on my watchlist and hope to get to it this weekend if all falls into the proper order. Can't wait to see what you think of Static. See you on the Otherside. view book