Hello John, Well, I love a good ghost story! Ghasts and gheists, fascinating... I liked the interchange between the family members, the scolding and the teasing, very natural and realistic. My main criticism is your use of 'commanded' ''retorted' 'asked delightedly' 'mumbled' 'said urgently' 'sna... view book

Hello Jen, I noticed you had a nasty red arrow so I bumped you up my priority list. A very unusual opening paragraph, which interested me straightaway. 'trill of butterflies' - nicely different metaphor! Good way of feeding in background via dialogue with a stranger, doesn't make the story stumbl... view book

Hello Jan, This is great... very easy to read, flows along nicely. The theme is a familiar one that people can either identify with, or know somebody who has been through it. The main characters are very real, and their dialogue is natural. I sympathised with Maggie and Cindy's strong character sho... view book

Thoroughly enjoyed this - two adventurous ladies! Well done. Shelved. Nicky view book

Hello Maria, Got a spare hour so quickly glancing at your book as promised. Wow - what a start to a story! The opening words - lulling us into a false sense of security, and then the horror. There is nothing quite as sinister as an evil doll or toy, or baby... and I was mesmerised from the start. ... view book