Apologies for the delay in reading your book. I think your premise shows promise, but I think you need to craft the story so it unfolds with more drama and impact. Here’s my thought – let the dialogue unfold a bit more instead of summarizing. I think this would help me understand things more f... view book

Unusual premise. I’d encourage you to craft a strong opening to your story. Make it so compelling that people can’t put it down. Chapter 1 If you’re writing from the perspective of a teenage girl, I think you need always focus on having conversational language. I don’t know many young people w... view book

Julia - Your stories are compelling and written well. My thought is that this seems like only half the story. I would take this book in one of two directions: 1) make it a memoir and put in thoughts of how your interactions with the children influenced your life. 2) make it a self-help book - what d... view book

What a great read and an intriguing plot. I love the opening court scene and the character development continues well in the next chapter. You've made something "out there" seem quite reasonable in the well you tell the story. Shelved. Nancy Cycling, Wine and Men view book

I'm not really sure what to think of your book. I like the premise as I read your pitch. Then I read the first two chapters, twice, and I can't find anything wrong with your writing. Yet, somehow, it doesn't grab me. Particularly, the start of chapter two seems to move along slowly. Maybe more dialo... view book