Hi Dee, I've read on up to Ch 13 and it's all still very enjoyable. Just a couple of thoughts to offer in case they're of use. You seem to be relying a little more on summary, particularly once the action returns to Oxford. Could you pick out some of the more important moments and expand them into ... view book

Hi Hermione, I've been meaning to comment on your book ever since your kind words about mine. I just wanted to say that I enjoyed the bits of this I read very much - more actually than your other one - perhaps because the subject matter interested me more as a walker but also because of the style i... view book

Hi Dee, Great stuff! There is a real feeling of Turkey here with a lot I recognise about the country in the 90s. I liked the way you use Turkish language – it made me think I should include some more myself. Mehmet is a really convincing character with his distinctive charm, attitudes and way of spe... view book

I’ve read your first three chapters and the writing there is extremely accomplished. Your prologue is lovely, though I’d have welcomed more of a hint about how it relates to what’s to come. Is it water he feels, or oil, or something else? There some great inventive use of language e.g. in your descr... view book

Hi Joe, It looks like you're well on your way to the top but I guess every little helps! Really enjoyed your conversational style and especially your excellent prologue - very concise but it really sets the scene. Best wishes, Lucy view book