After reading the first chapter, I can say that this is well-written and flows beautifully from one sentence to the next. I didn’t even mind there not being much dialogue (I usually become a bit bored with a lot of long paragraphs but was, instead, rather enchanted by the tale). I found it very swe... view book

Just finished the first chapter and thoroughly enjoyed it. Quite a fast pace, with a good balance of narrative and dialogue, plus the present tense really worked for this and I don't usually like reading things in the present tense. The beginning pulls the reader in instantly. Great opening paragra... view book

Right, I’m making notes as I read. Chapter One: Great opening sentence. However, ‘it never fails’ made me feel a little confused. I was like WHAT never fails. Not sure it really makes sense and don’t think you need it, especially with that next sentence, (which is also great, by the way. You can’t... view book

Righto, I've just finished Chapter One and am itching for more! This is a truly great idea, and an original one at that. It's aimed perfectly at the 9-12 age group, and I expect they'd just love it! The fly on the eyeball at the beginning ... very strange and eerie. I'm intrigued as to how that fit... view book

T-cup - ahh, what a great name for a fairy! It conjures up some vivid pictures. The name, Gobey, is fantastic too - makes me think of bogeys, (and kids love all that kind of stuff!) What I loved most about what I read were your descriptions, particularly about the Boglins. They're painted very well... view book