Just a small comment, Suzie, on technical stuff, since the plot, the narrative and the characters are spot on, There are many things an agent, an editor or a publisher hate, but there is one particular thing that really urks the living s**t out of them: Swifties and saidbookisms. Here's a swifty a... view book

I light a Camel, fix me a highball of Four Roses-no ice-...here's my comment. STORYLINE: Sailed through like a breeze. Strong, witty,great. CHARACTERS: Dare to change even a dot, and you die! ;) DIALOGUE: Here's the real minefield. I would know, I stepped on a few mines myself. Namely, SAIDBOOKIS... view book

I really appreciate your comment! I revised it, but I expect to finish the first draft before I go back for editing! view book

I can imagine it in a play - with J.M.Barrie's ghost hovering somewhere above the first rows, smiling happily. A few typos but that's small potatoes, really. For your target group it's a joy. For big boys like me...unfortunately, most of us have lost that fairy dust. And I'm so pleased to see a book... view book

I've just finished all four chapters. You should really keep going. Lovely pace, powerfull characters, attention to detail. I must confess; I am a fantasy type of guy. I'll be honest and say that it's not the type of book I would buy. Having said that, I am just one. There are millions of people out... view book