First off I really liked your Forward. It tells a person what to expect and what not to expect from the book. Your language is clear and concise making it and authoritative (at least that was the impression I had reading it ... maybe the better word to use is confident but it also was imbued with a ... view book

Chapter 3 It is sometimes difficult to gauge the plot when one starts in a later chapter so I won't comment on that. I will say that I felt a general progression of the story and it seemed to me that Ty and Alisa had just been in an altercation with some other guy. (of course I didn't quite know ... view book

Queen Victoria and the Yellow Dog By John Burns He he ... I don't think your pitch is doing this book justice. I just started reading it and absolutely fell in love with it. I remember your telling me that you don't want any inauthentic fawning over reviews, but seriously, when you create a char... view book

Mattie Most people start critiquing from chapter one so I decided to start at chapter 8 just in case you haven't had too many crits this far into the book. I won't be able to comment on plot because I have not read the beginning chapters but I should be able to gauge the pace and other elemen... view book

In the prologue we are introduced to the MC, Marna LaFontaine and her admission to LaBroc University. The prologue engages the reader immediately. The story is told in first person narrative and the author does a good job of creating an MC with an authentic and pleasing voice. We are led to understa... view book