FWI – I did not read your long pitch. I just read the title and the short pitch. Congratulations, big man. You got me interested in realistic fiction. I tend to stick with books where someone is flying or something is blowing up. On to chapter two. I looked thru the taxi window at what might b... view book

The prologue was intriguing. You had me interested in a cat. At that point, I might have read an entire book from the cat’s perspective. Your use of language is confusing to me at times. It may be a culture difference. I live in the U.S. But there are some things that read awkwardly. For instance... view book

SF42 Review Your pitch caught my attention. It's an interesting premise. As I read, I saw that you have the imagery of what is happening very clearly in your mind. But it translates awkwardly onto the narration. This is mostly because of unnecessary words added into sentences, roundabout ways of ... view book

This chapter is good. I was at first wary about so much happening in between the two chapters but I think you handled it well. However, I think you should go through this chapter for editing reasons. I noticed some words I don't think you need, such as in "his very soul itself." I think 'itself' isn... view book

Your pitch caught my attention. Your story sounds intriguing. And it may be. But as I started reading, I had trouble getting far. You have a lot of grammatical problems to work out that are distracting and they are holding me back from reading. I'll read more so I can give you my thoughts on your st... view book