Brittany, I love it. Can't wait to finish reading it, as a matter of fact. I think you could use a good editor, but I'm more than glad to back your book. I can't wait to find out what happened to make Samantha the way she is, and I hope David is as nice as he seems. Good work, and good luck.... view book

First-person perspective/point of view is hard to pull off. Remember that if the narrator is speaking from her perspective, she cannot read the mind of a different person and know things that they are thinking. Example - narrator can say "she looked frustrated and put out" but cannot say "she felt... view book

Some constructive criticism: This jumps around so much I had a very difficult time following it. I'm thinking you might be doing that on purpose, to represent the chaos in the character's mind, but for me, it is just a little too much. Also, keep your point of view/perspective neat and the same, ... view book

I think you need to work on the manuscript a little - polish it up. Have reader/writer friends do a Beta read for you. Definitely an interesting concept, and with a little work, something I would pick up off a shelf and read. There are some great writers over at the Kindle Boards forum, if you've... view book

This is neat - I know where Orange County is! Well constructed, very dark. Deserves a good, long look. Will be glad to back you. Good luck. view book