Hey, David, I finally got around your story (one day later than promised, but I'm here, right?) and it was well worth it. The narration is crisp and direct, and we don't waste time in learning what Jack wants. While he's not the most sympathetic character at first (we're told rather quickly he's ... view book

This is a great work. Your writing is clear and concise, and I love your attention to down-earthed details, which is a constant reminder that despite having elf and dwarf and all, this world isn't all in pink. You have the gritty feel alright, and I love it. I do have a problem with the prologue... view book

Dark, you have a great story going on here. Your characterisation is fabulous, and with just a few paragraphs we have an excellent idea of who we're dealing with. As a character-focused reader (and writer!), I find this great! I'm three chapters in as I write this (I'd rather write the comment be... view book

I just read the first four chapters. Congratulations, this is good! I remember the small excerpt you had showed me months ago, and this is far better. Keep working on it, you're on the right path to an epic story. And expect me to come and read the rest. :) view book

Backed! I am not done with the reading, but it's getting -quite- late where I am at, and I will definitely be back for this story. The beginning is masterful, and it pulled me right in. You have a great way to bring another world to life! view book