Yarg review. Good start on chapter one, but I would think of changing the words soundlessly and what sounded. Two sound words, jarred a little. Love the imagery, its macabre and dark, just what kids like. Strong main characters, (I love the ginger hair, we need more ginger heroes) You have an im... view book

Really humorous start to the story, loved the names of the places and people you chose. You have a lyrical flow to your writing, and it comes across in a soft conversational way, which I like a lot. Your characters are colourful and vibrant. This and the dialogue ass feeling and pace to the text.... view book

Yarg review. Hiya Ben. A quirky beginning that really amused me. :) You have a relaxed conversational approach to your writing that is refreshing. Loved ‘Depression isn’t like death in a volcano. It’s more like drowning in a whirlpool.’ Excellent use of the written language. Short, sharp sen... view book

Hiya Christian Great start. I read it our loud and actually found myself whispering. Great descriptions and an assault on the senses. Lyrical and poetic, you have the gift of storytelling, with your bardic approach to the art of writing. Your pace increases and so does the mood, it’s like goin... view book

Hiya again Angela. Good beginning, sounds like me at the moment. Love the sentence 'Very few things are close to my heart and so writing this book is like copying and pasting me onto the paper.’ Written like an author. Great introduction, leaving the reader with an interesting question to reaso... view book