Cindy, I enjoyed this a lot. The early twist--that the daughter had not been kidnapped and the fear that inspired was novel and interesting. I'm curious how the husband's work will play into all of thing and whether it's a red herring or part of the story. Well done! Erik view book

KC, Still working on it, but I'm happy to give an update. I'm at the end of Chapter 6 right now. I think this is a really great historical romance. I like the attention to detail around the Civil War, but mostly I like the contrast with the hidden valley. It has a certain Shangri La feel to it... view book

Stopping by again. I just reached the chapter where Hank is in therapy for sex addiction. I had a really hard time with that and didn't at all see it coming at all. I would foreshadow it more strongly and earlier so that we know he's facing that, and when we discover he's in therapy, we're reliev... view book

I was intrigued by the pitch and wanted to check out your story. I have not finished, but am somewhere on the 3rd section (as authonomy sorts it). As others have indicated here, it's an intriguing hook, and it definitely drew me in. In terms of writing: I thought you made good use of imagery. ... view book

Dan, I really like what you have going here. As others have said, it reads close to a Clancy novel. I have no writing style notes, but here are a couple plot notes that I thought would strengthen it: 1) I think you should consider the chapter on the Libyan highway as a flashback perhaps. Th... view book