Rufus...or is it Ian? I think this has real potential. Your descriptions of local culture are captivating and your premise certainly is intriguing. The first chapter was effective, establishing a palatable sense of dread. I had difficulty making a connection with Rebecca early on. Although thin... view book

This can't be your first work because it's too well-written and polished for a newby. The dialogue is realistic, the pace is feverish, and the plot is thought-provoking. You will most certainly do well with this. Backed! DL Hammons FALLEN KNIGHT view book

Lorri, I'm very impressed with this. Your writing is fluid, and the tone shifts perfectly with the POV changes. You have an eye for detail as well as characterization. As far as the plot goes, this is something that would be right up my alley. The only critique I can offer is that in the 3rd ... view book

Kim, This is very engaging. I suspect that you'll be targeting it for the YA crowd and in my opinion you'll do well with it. The only thing that I took notice of was when Sam met Leesha for the first time, during his attack, the time immediately after the attack was devoted to the interaction b... view book

Kim, This is very engaging. I suspect that you'll be targeting it for the YA crowd and in my opinion you'll do well with it. The only thing that I took notice of was when Sam met Leesha for the first time, during his attack, the time immediately after the attack was devoted to the interaction b... view book