Hi Linda, I'd say you were hooked on fish (sorry). As to the story; there's a lot of family drama out there, a lot of it on Authonomy. Dead wives, husbands and children, faithless lovers and bullying spouses, so there has to be something different to get noticed. Tropical fish is novel. However t... view book

Hello RB, Picked up your message and you've just caught me. Motive Irrelevant. I like the title. I also like the idea. However you have a long way to go to make this into a thriller. There are moments where expectations are raised but these are few and far beween in the three chapters I've read so... view book

Hi Alasdair, I read a few of the comments below before writing this just to make sure I wasn't going to be too hard on you. I've been out of step with mainstream opinion on several occasions. Knowing what others think doesn't stop me from speaking my mind, however. How does that sound? Is it to t... view book

Hi Frankie, I've just read Robert's crit, as it's the only other one and I didn't want to cover the same ground if I could avoid it. In general I agree with his views. He makes a lot of sense and it's good advice. What he didn't say is that you do have the required writing skills to make a good ... view book

Hi Freddie, This is brave. Taking on a contentious cultural issue as a theme for a thriller. I am quite put out by the style of writing. The dispassionate overview that disconnects the reader from the subject. The author's voice that directs the reader to another place is quite heavy-handed. From ... view book