Found a few minutes to look at the first chapter, and it's quite interesting. There's quite alot of ambiguity about the gods for saying they seem to be so prevalent. I also find it odd that you only have 'thousands' of humans at your writerly disposal - I worry that such a distinct limit on numbers,... view book

An interesting Pitch and just as interesting prologue. Unfortunately it didn't really do it for me. that is not to say it isn't good though; i just like very wordy and descriptive work, and you have a very straight to the point style. some of the text needs a little bit of work; 'nose rose' for exa... view book

Hi again; i've read some further and i have to say, please get rid of the (R)'s, (C)'s, and the TM's. there is absolutely no need for them, and they are really distracting. i realise that you are trying to give your story a realistic feel, but the inclusion of these and the brand names only serves t... view book

Hi Robert, i'd just like to make a few comments about your piece, but first let me say this; i'm from England, so i had a diferent sense of grammar, language, and speech than you. Okay, first thing i would say is cut the 'all' in the first line; it distracted me (due to the grammar) immensly, which... view book

Hmm, I'm impressed. To be honest with you, i've not read all that much so far, but i really liked the little prologue; it was nice and decisive (well, about what the Magi aren't), which i liked, and the first chapter starts of at a frenetic pace. I shall continue my perusal :) view book