I've read the first two chapters and enjoyed them. They were polished too, I couldn't pick up on any typos or grammar/punctuation errors. I only really had one issue with what I read. You have very good imagery, but I think sometimes you might go a little overboard with it, which is a very easy trap... view book

I've read the first two chapters, and I'm very impressed. I love the mysterious style of your writing and it is very polished. There's only one error I could pick up on: Not the power to go back (need a comma here or an "and") unpick the failings... Anyway, I'm going to be shelving this. Good ... view book

Hello! Sorry it took me so long to get round to reading this. I've read the first three chapters. I like you're writing and it flows well, but technically this book doesn't seem very polished. Just little things like typos or punctuation mix ups. Personally I think you're writing would benefit from ... view book

Hey, here for my promised read. Firstly a comment on the pitch: "leaving them trapped within the prideful barbs of their own free will". I have to admit I have no idea what this means, it just sounds a bit like waffle lol. Anyway, there's absolutely nothing I can pick at in the first chapter. It's w... view book

Hello! Read chapter 1. Firstly comments on the technical side of things: and the moldy (mouldy) stank (stink) of the closest monster's breath. I waved my arm around quickly (this doesn't create the right image to me at all. It makes the character sound panicked and inexperienced, which jars wi... view book