Hi Lynne, I enjoyed reading this very much but I found there was a lot of 'telling' rather than showing which meant a lot of the information coming across felt a bit laboured. Some of the dialogue might benefit from being read aloud - when we talk we tend to say 'wouldn't' rather than would not for ... view book

I enjoyed this Lexi but was caught up by why she had an outdoor sofa, particularly when it was somethng she couldnt afford. Why was it there?! Also, my dog would bark instantly if she heard someone opening the roof terrace door. She'd be protecting me/him. And I was a bit confused as to why she sug... view book

Hi Katharine, I know you said you were going to Cornwall to write for a week so hope you have a good time and get a lot of writing done. I think you have a good voice and I enjoyed the first chapter - will be back for more. Your dialogue comes over as a bit forced. Try saying it aloud perhaps. And b... view book

This is very atmospheric and full of lovely descriptions and questions to make us read on. Not sure if there aren't a few too many descriptions though - I was advised against too much recently. I was also told to beware of flashbacks, thuogh personally I think this works well. I like the way you've... view book

Really racy writing - but for me the descripton of Mooshead slowed down the narrative. I wanted to know more about what was going to happen, not hear about beer! But that's very minor point. Will read more later - thanks. view book