Claire, I think you write beautifully. Your word choices are lovely, and I especially enjoyed reading the section on the cherry blossoms. It was very descriptive and gorgeous. With that said, I admit to being a little confused in the first chapter with the characters. Lucy and Kate were pining for... view book

Well, I read the first chapter, but I'm truly not sure if I can go on. Stories of abuse like this really bother me, maybe because I have kids of my own, and I'd kill the first person who tried to hurt them. But I think you've struck a chord here, and the voice you have in your first chapter is spot-... view book

So, I bought this from amazon, and I'm having ever so much fun reading it! It's like Rambo meets The Long Kiss Goodnight! It's awesome! Your main character is great, and I love the way you reveal her to us in bits and pieces. Very non-info-dumpish. Lara's quirks and slightly odd personality are fant... view book

Hi Carla, We'll, I've read the first chapter, and I have to tell you that your humor hits the mark. Jack sounds like quite a character! He's sweet and naive and slightly wacky, and I feel back that he didn't get the corre t broccoli before all hell broke loose. Here are my very humble suggestions a... view book

Daniel, I think chapter 1 reads better now. It seems slightly more human, although the language is still flowery and a little reminiscent of 1800s and early 1900s writing when big words and complex sentences were the norm. Not that it's a bad thing. I think that the tone is definitely literary and y... view book