When I read the pitch, I thought the concept was good. But after checking out the first chapter, I instantly loved it. The only criticisim that I have is about the way it is written. Some parts don't flow as easily as they should. Revising for readibility would do this book a world of good and appro... view book

This isn't really my type of read. To be honest, I wasn't really captivated about it and didn't feel encouraged to read any further than the first two chapters. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the descriptions which seemed to flow easily and naturally. The plot is fine, but I do advise you to look over your... view book

I really liked the voice in your story. So many books come off a little dry in the area but it really makes the character more believable. Since the main character is the central focus of the book, I think you've done a great job of making Jack someone the reader can get behind. I love the reference... view book

Okay, first off, the beginning was a little slow moving but diffinitely intriguing. And while I loved descriptions I was happy when I started to read some real dialogue. I kept wondering what was up with the unknown gentleman in the first chapter and that is what kept me reading. But by the end of t... view book

First of all, I like the revision. I could tell a lot of thought was put into the product. From the two chapters I've read, I didn't spot any errors (or at least, none that I noted). I only took issue with one thing. When Vincent found the car, he'd been searching how long? It seemed like things... view book