After 233 comments there's not too much to say different than what has already been commeted on. I wish you the best in your race to the Editor's desk. AR view book

I read through the first 3 chapters and found an interesting story. I was expecting sci-fi as noted in your genre selection, but didn't see it. Maybe it comes later in the story. This reads as a very traditional fantasy story, and you play the stereotypes of the genre well. THe narratvie voice, wri... view book

Okay, I read through chapter 4 and found a very interesting story. Their is a lot of layering to the plot, which keeps the pace going very fast. I love that you started with the bad guy because it set the tone and depth. You've detailed out the character's very well and given them a realistic and in... view book

You have a very detailed story plot here and the Jack is quite a main character. I was a little nervous that I'd read a sports driven story and was happy you drove the character and not his profession. That can be hard to do, especially in sports professions. My only qualm (and it's minor), I fel... view book

You have a very complex story here with a lot of layers and dynamics. The characters are flawed and interesting. The plot is dark and mirky. The plot is pace well, a bit slow at times, but overall well. You have a very twisted narrative voice that enhances the tone of the story. Great job writing... view book