Hi Kirk I think it's an interesting premise and already I want to know why someone would want to steal a Lion's statue. However, I think the opening needs some work as it's a bit clunky and this is obviously where you need to hook your reader. For what it's worth, my advice would be to read the di... view book

You write very well and because of that the odd sentences / phrases / descriptions that aren't quite up to scratch stand out. It's not that they're bad, just that they could be even better (hope that makes sense). For example - describing the men as 'middle aged' - it's a bit vague. Also when you ... view book

Very enjoyable. Moves along at a great pace. Backed. view book

You have a lovely lighthearted and uplifting style and it's easy to read. The only thing I would say, is that a lot of backstory comes out at the beginning i.e.the job transfer and the foster homes and I wonder whether it might be better coming out more gradually and naturally. That said, I'm used ... view book

Good premise. Good pitch. Good writing. Backed view book