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I'll keep it simple: No, I won't back your book.

You're welcome to look at and comment on mine, but I won't return the favour.

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The Timekeeper: Nick of Time

Tom Williams & Justin Stanchfi....

Nick Fox, a fourteen-year-old boy, accompanied by a time machine with attitude, on an adventure without limits.


When Nick Fox tinkers with a strange device, he transports himself four hundred years into the future, a ruined future in which humanity has regressed to a pre-Industrial level. Nick then becomes the Timekeeper, charged with the duty of ensuring the Timeline is not compromised by rogue time travellers.

Only Nick and his new friend Wendy, a girl from the 25th century, can stop the rogues changing the future. But keeping the Timeline intact means both Nick and Wendy might lose loved ones forever.

Ranging from the last Ice Age to the 25th century, with many stops in between, Nick of Time is a fast-paced story, complete in one volume of 45,000 words.


IMPORTANT: I WON'T BE RETURNING READS ON "NICK OF TIME" AT PRESENT.

 

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I wrote 727 days ago

Prologue... Maybe a bit long, but not too bad. Consider swapping a few of the "she's" for Karen. It felt like nearly every sentence began with "she", though perhaps you were aiming for that effect. Chapter 1... I don't think you need italics AND a ' for thoughts - pick one or the other. ... view book

I wrote 738 days ago

Comments on Chapter 1... What I like about this is the original setting and character. The shaman prologue is interesting. We've seen the master-servant routine before in fiction and film, of course, but there's always room for one more, especially of this esoteric kind. The only complaint I h... view book

I wrote 740 days ago

Comments on Prologue... Good mix of POV characterisation and exposition. "It was pulled off her body with force". Let's up the dynamics here: why not "It was ripped from her body" or something of the like? "Flashlight" = "torch" in UK English (Authonomy) - not sure about West Indian English... view book

I wrote 743 days ago

Comments on Chapter 1... "elevate" = "alleviate", I presume. "Grisly" doesn't seem to be the right word here. "Grimacing" might be better. Ok, I think you might have a story here, but I feel it's drowning in small detail and over-writing. Look at EVERY sentence and ask yourself two question... view book

I wrote 746 days ago

"...cracked... frayed nerves..." - mixed metaphor? Perhaps "fragile" could be swapped for "frayed"? "stark contrast" - a cliche. Any alternative way of wording it (have to admit I can't think of one...) "... made her jump..." - I presume you mean Megan jumps, but it could be the reverend mothe... view book

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