I actually had this on my list for a while and I have only just got around to reading it and I think that it's great. Although there are only two chapters up, I feel that there's great potential and the characters already have a well drawn outline. Often I find switching between POVs very confusing ... view book

I was pleasantly surprised when I read this. The story exudes mystery and the characters are great. You give the right amount of information to keep us reading as well as keeping the secrets of the book, it's quite fustrating at times as they seem to come across this issue of Ellia dying for them so... view book

I have to say I only read the first chapter of this story before giving up. It lacks fluidity and realism, as well as the fact that there's a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. The sentence structures should be reviewed and edited and you should consider changing your tone in story telling as you... view book

This is a very gripping story which you have here so far. I think it has great potential, the characters are very likable and you have very good sentence and paragraph lengths. Just being very picky, I think there might be an over use of the word retch... Thank you very much for uploading thi... view book

I think this is a great story, with lots of potential. It's very well written and the characters are very likable. The tone which you have used definitely appeals to the young adult age group. I wish you the best of luck. view book